Lots of room for improvement.
It's... short. And it needs a melody. The deep instrument that starts up around 0:06 could stand to be lessened in volume. That stretch with the stand-alone percussion playing wasn't that great, get rid of that. Sorry if it sounds like I'm hacking and killing away at your song with criticism, but there's a lot to improve here.
LOL, im not offended by people telling me what needs to be done with my songs.... how else im i gonna improve. Thanks for your help
Not quite perfect
Overall the song was good, but I still am not sure if I like it as much as some of your other works. It felt a bit cluttered in some parts, like there was too much happening at once. The pause around 1:15 wasn't that great and I've learned that usually pauses in the middle of songs are not so great. (perhaps this makes me a hypocrite since I'm guilty of this but I digress.) Also, distinguishing a melody from the rest of the song would, in my opinion, help things improve. Maybe I'm sounding a bit negative... don't get me wrong, overall good song, just pointing out what I think should change here.
Definitely fair critique.
I should say, though, that this music differs a lot from my other work on purpose. There is supposed to be an often overwhelming quantity of musical information thrown at the listener that is all revelead in many listens. Or, clearer but overstated musical phrases... just all-out sensory assault haha.
Thanks for the review!
Heck yes!
This review cannot match the one below me but I'll try to be helpful.
I'd say it's a pretty neat song. Some of the percussion seems a bit... uh, I don't know how to put it. Like it goes over the maximum volume allowed, that kind of effect. The tune was lively and it didn't get old. I actually think this could serve as two different songs. Like, the first slower bit could be broken off into one song and the faster part could be another. And they'd go side-by-side probably. Am I making sense here?
Actually yes. As I was going over it, I started to feel like it might make sense to split them, seems I wasn't the only one who thought so. I think I may just look into splitting them up while addressing the issues mentioned here.
Thanks a ton for the feedback!
Not bad
It's pretty good. Though it feels like you may want to reconsider your choice in instruments, there's some potential here.
well i'm sure it wouldn't sound quite so surreal if I changed the stuff but i'll take it into consideration, thanks!
Well done.
"Ice Cage" fits the song pretty well. It's ambient, all right. And pretty spooky and mysterious and whatnot. I'm not quite sure how to describe it just so. But it is good.
I'm glad you like it! :D
Spooky and mysterious and whatnot was exactly what I was going for.
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